A lack of peace & rhyme scheme

The war swept in and the mind Fell dull and the bullets strip The nature of pride and the Soldiers: humans, of their freedom The fire burns our eyes, our souls As our hope fuels this fire And the black smoke fills our lungs And forever stain our memories The leaves of autumn was no more And the winter cold replaced our hearts Beating, breathing negative degrees Even in the summer when the sun had shone The moon only showed us the blood And the stars only our hope And the distant smoke Drifted closer and closer